55 Fiction


I stood there, with no scope of movement.

“Did you do it?” he asked.

“I guess” she said.

“Guesses? They barely work for me girl!”

“It was difficult, I tried but..”

A bullet passed through her chest. Blood splattered. She lay cold. He stared at the cold body and turned.



Death waited for me.



PS: My very first attempt @ 55 Fiction !

Comments

Ashrita said…
Good work babe :) but I got a little confused? "her" and "I" are the same person right? I am sorry :P Call me dumb :P
December 25, 2010 at 10:41 PM
A.prem said…
i and her are different people! :D
hehe..!
December 25, 2010 at 11:24 PM
CRD said…
good job. ive wanted to try something like this. maybe i'll give it a try one of these days..

Do visit mine..

Cheers
CRD
July 7, 2011 at 11:19 PM
phatichar said…
An 'out-of-body' experience this?? :)

Nice..could be interpreted in several ways. My confusion is not with 'I' and 'her', it's more with 'I' and the 'he' in the end. I guess that's confusing. But nonetheless..great effort. Kudos. :)
May 18, 2012 at 8:44 AM
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